Standing together with her and her two daughters, I found what seemed like a good moment to ask her about the squat scene of the sixties and seventies. Unfortunately she was too strongly under the influence of mdma for a coherent interview; she apologized for her state and I moved on. Francesca was now more passionately gregarious under the influence of mdma, known also as ecstasy. She spoke about her musical production aspirations becoming materialized, something which she had referred to at our last interview in a juice cafe in Clapham. She expressed her desire and plan to move away from organizing and more into the creativity of music production.

Standing together with Francesca her and her two daughters, I took advantage of the found what seemed like a good moment to ask her about the squat scene of the sixties and seventies. Unfortunately she was too strongly under the influence of mdma—known as ecstasy— forto give a coherent interview, and; she apologized profusely. for her state and I moved on. However, as sherancesca became more and now more passionately gregarious under the influence of mdma, known also as ecstasy, she proceeded to talk. She spoke about her musical aspirations. Earlier, when we had met becoming materialized, something which she had referred to at our last interview in thea juice cafe in Clapham, . Sshe had expressed her desire to get out of and plan to move away from organizing and more into the more creativeity business of music production.

Standing together with Francesca and her two daughters, I took advantage of the moment to ask her about the squat scene of the sixties and seventies. Unfortunately she was too strongly under the influence of mdma—known as ecstasy—to give a coherent interview, and apologized profusely. However, as she became more and more gregarious under the influence, she proceeded to talk about her musical aspirations. Earlier, when we had met in the juice cafe in Clapham, she had expressed her desire to get out of organizing and into the more creative business of music production.

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Original (excerpt from book on ethics)

One cannot immediately jump into legislation from a standing position. Many issues require clarifying legislation to begin with. Legal dogmatics and legal techniques are among the necessary foundations for any type of legislation. In my opinion, this legal dogmatic groundwork, which is the prerequisite for the clarity and reliability of the law laid down, has to be conducted by the “scholars”, the “learned ones in Bahá’”

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L One egislation does not materialize in a vacuum. cannot immediately jump into legislation from a standing position. Many issues must be require clarif ied beforehand . ying legislation to begin with. Legal theory and dogmatics and techniques are among the prerequisites necessary foundations for any type of legislation. Th e clarification of is legal principles dogmatic groundwork , the development of a Bahá’í jurisprudence , must , in my opinion, precede the laying down of   which is the prerequisite for the cl e ar ity and reliab i l e ity of the law laid down , and must be has to be conducted by the “scholars”, the “learned ones in Bahá”.

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Legislation does not materialize in a vacuum. Many issues must be clarified beforehand. Legal theory and legal techniques are among the prerequisites for any type of legislation. The clarification of legal principles, the development of a Bahá’í jurisprudence, must, in my opinion, precede the laying down of clear and reliable law, and must be conducted by the “scholars”, the “learned ones in Bahá”.

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Bahá'u'lláh's idea of a world community would replace previous ties and alliances. His vision was articulated before Bismarck 's alliance policy ("Bündnispolitik") was put into effect. The model of collective security in Bahá'u'lláh's Tablet to Queen Victoria does not call for the equating of the anonymity of victim and aggressor state with indifference. The state community should be encouraged to evolve from its traditional understanding of friendship to a more all encompassing network of relationships.

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Bahá'u'lláh's plan/proposal for idea of a world community — articulated before Bismarck 's alliance policy ("Bündnispolitik") was put into effect — wholly would replace s the previous notion of friendly ties and alliances , based on such familiar commonalities as religion, race, past history of cooperation, or family ties . Nor, does t His vision was articulated before Bismarck's alliance policy ("Bündnispolitik") was put into effect. T he model of collective security contained in Bahá'u'lláh's Tablet to Queen Victoria does not call for the equat e ing of the the anonymity of victim and aggressor state with indifference. Rather, t T he state community of nations must should be encouraged to evolve from its traditional understanding of friendship to a far more all encompassing network of interdependent relationships , based on the principle of unity of the human family .

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Bahá'u'lláh's proposal for a world community— articulated before Bismarck 's alliance policy ("Bündnispolitik") was put into effect —wholly replaces the previous notion of friendly ties and alliances, based on such familiar commonalities as religion, race, past history of cooperation, or family ties. Nor does the model of collective security contained in Bahá'u'lláh's Tablet to Queen Victoria equate the anonymity of victim and aggressor state with indifference. Rather, the community of nations must evolve from its traditional understanding of friendship to a far more encompassing network of interdependent relationships, based on the principle of unity of the human family.

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